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twilight and the cookie jar by Coltsteelstallion twilight and the cookie jar by Coltsteelstallion
created with the inkpad app for ipad.
mlp,fim (c) Lauren Faust and Hasbro.
art by me.

twilight isnt my favorite pony but she sure is the cutest one.

first time filly Twilight and the sparkle family (ecept for shining armor). got some trouble with the backrground, but i think it turned out alright.

:iconcoltsteelstallion: have a nice day
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You never cease to amaze me with what you can do with a tablet app.

There are a couple of things that I will point out that could've been done differently or omitted.

Be careful with gradients, the show rarely makes use of them, usually for clouds, hills, ground, and the sky. Objects tend to have a solid shadow. Examples in the comic include the math poster and the pillar on the left (for the math poster, you could add either a parchment paper with a geometric shape(s) that is colored like paper or in hue with the wall, plus exclude the text because the show is detailed, but not too detailed).

The word "Cookies" on the jar could be of a different font that isn't so sharp, or be replaces with just squiggles. Same goes for the "Pleaaase", bright red is hard to look at comfortably.

Speaking of Panel 3, the background could have a potentially comedic effect if the background were replaced with a sparkly, bubbly scene like those seen in anime (here's such an example). Your call though.

Round the sharp edges at the bottom of the cookie jar.


Vision: Classic parental pushover scenario. Kind of rare in this day and time, and so bravo for making one.

Originality: I've seen my fair share of "Hnnnng"-induced-by-cuteness comics, this is slightly similar but nonetheless in the same effect. Cuteness is used for benefit though in this case as opposed to just stringing out "DAWWW's".

Technique: Did I mentioned how amazed I was in the first sentence of this critique? No? Well then; I'm amazed.

Impact: This is a very classic comic with a dose of pony (too much if you're prone to heart-attacks from cuteness).

Lovely comic and again a great comic from an unusual tool.
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This comic is funny when Twilight said "Pleaaase" . And it's so cute. I would give her anything i just can't resist that face. Even i can't even say no to that face. I hope you do more comics. I just love love love them! It makes me read over and over!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D :D :D :) :) :) . And i wonder what was the first thing she made that face. I love the face when twilight mom is looking at him shes like really really with that face. :D :D :D :D :D:D. I hope you do more that they are comedy! good luck!
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mechagodzilla3 15 hours ago  Student Artist
Did anyone else see he said God instead of Celestia?
Nice going. You're the best father ever. XD That was funny,though.
i love it Clapping Pony Icon - Twilight Sparkle 
Great  job Brohoof 
Not the puppy dog eyes !
yeah even i cant say no to that face of hers 
When I see her, oh that filly, the cuteness nearly kills me.

Replace nearly with did.
Hey Twilight, that's not fair using the puppy dog eyes, no one can resist that!
Unfortunately nopony to this day has the power to resist filly Twilight's "please" face.
Well, I can, but I still am almost overwhelmed by the cuteness
flash5611 Feb 5, 2014  Student General Artist
daww so cute i loves twilys cuteness
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