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twilight and the cookie jar by Coltsteelstallion twilight and the cookie jar by Coltsteelstallion
created with the inkpad app for ipad.
mlp,fim (c) Lauren Faust and Hasbro.
art by me.

twilight isnt my favorite pony but she sure is the cutest one.

first time filly Twilight and the sparkle family (ecept for shining armor). got some trouble with the backrground, but i think it turned out alright.

:iconcoltsteelstallion: have a nice day
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You never cease to amaze me with what you can do with a tablet app.

There are a couple of things that I will point out that could've been done differently or omitted.

Be careful with gradients, the show rarely makes use of them, usually for clouds, hills, ground, and the sky. Objects tend to have a solid shadow. Examples in the comic include the math poster and the pillar on the left (for the math poster, you could add either a parchment paper with a geometric shape(s) that is colored like paper or in hue with the wall, plus exclude the text because the show is detailed, but not too detailed).

The word "Cookies" on the jar could be of a different font that isn't so sharp, or be replaces with just squiggles. Same goes for the "Pleaaase", bright red is hard to look at comfortably.

Speaking of Panel 3, the background could have a potentially comedic effect if the background were replaced with a sparkly, bubbly scene like those seen in anime (here's such an example). Your call though.

Round the sharp edges at the bottom of the cookie jar.

Explanations

Vision: Classic parental pushover scenario. Kind of rare in this day and time, and so bravo for making one.

Originality: I've seen my fair share of "Hnnnng"-induced-by-cuteness comics, this is slightly similar but nonetheless in the same effect. Cuteness is used for benefit though in this case as opposed to just stringing out "DAWWW's".

Technique: Did I mentioned how amazed I was in the first sentence of this critique? No? Well then; I'm amazed.

Impact: This is a very classic comic with a dose of pony (too much if you're prone to heart-attacks from cuteness).

Lovely comic and again a great comic from an unusual tool.
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This comic is funny when Twilight said "Pleaaase" . And it's so cute. I would give her anything i just can't resist that face. Even i can't even say no to that face. I hope you do more comics. I just love love love them! It makes me read over and over!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D :D :D :) :) :) . And i wonder what was the first thing she made that face. I love the face when twilight mom is looking at him shes like really really with that face. :D :D :D :D :D:D. I hope you do more that they are comedy! good luck!
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:iconanimecitizen:
AnimeCitizen Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2016  Hobbyist Filmographer
XDD
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:iconsuperswagmlg:
superswagmlg Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2016
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH ded
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:iconginam9816:
Ginam9816 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2016
Hi again! I've done a comic dub of another comic of yours. ;) youtu.be/wjeNBY63CeQ
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:iconcoltsteelstallion:
Coltsteelstallion Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2016
Super awesome!!!
love the voices and background music. Little jazzy fits it quite well XD

thank you for making this ^_^
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:iconv1ewt1ful:
V1EWT1FUL Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
hahahahhahhahahahaha
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:iconxajelandrox:
xAjelandrox Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2016  Hobbyist Filmographer
los padres no deben ser quienes apliquen disiplina a sus hijos jajajaja
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:iconasctoons:
ASCToons Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Pues no pero es y pues si no podemos hacer nada deberá seguir siendo así :S
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:iconcolonelbsacquet:
ColonelBSacquet Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2016
¿ Los padres, aplicar disciplina a las hijas ?
:-D

Imposible. Claro, es imposible.
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:iconasctoons:
ASCToons Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No amigo
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:iconannemarie1986:
AnneMarie1986 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's how fathers are for their daughters:giggle:
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:iconkirbyfalcon:
kirbyfalcon Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconpussinbootsplz:
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:iconpinkspacebird:
PinkSpaceBird Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
That face is creepy it makes me wanna scream
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:iconkweenkate:
KweenKate Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this stupid my friend told me to repost this          WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will poop, even if you only looked at the word warning!
Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental
hospital, because she pooped her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to poop all the
staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so
they set up a special room to make her poop, as humane as possible but it went wrong the
toiler they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she exploded.
Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on
a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and  poops  you slowly, by farting on you
and watching you cry to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and
she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste
this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow.You
will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in your toilet, pooping and farting.
THIS IS NOT FAKE!!
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br4ndonm4rio Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2015
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ninjagirl99204 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2015
pokemon gif Vulpix pokemon gif sylveon Pokemon Gif Growlithe Victini Nom Plz The cuteness.It's too much!!!!:3
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:icongirldrawer123:
Girldrawer123 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
funny! <3 twilight was soooooooo cuuute
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:iconmiko-the-fox:
Miko-The-Fox Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I shoulda done that XD
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:icongothamscarecrow:
GothamScarecrow Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2015
Give him credit at least he didn't get a Twiabetes-induced heart attack!
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:iconpiccolagiuggiola:
piccolagiuggiola Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
PLEAAASE *Free Icon/Emote* Nutella Pusheen (OMG) 
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:iconsuperswagmlg:
superswagmlg Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2016
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ded
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:iconmysteriousgummy:
Mysteriousgummy Featured By Owner May 22, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Twilight: pweasssseeeeeee
Nazi: OH GOD, I SURRENDER! TAKE THE GUN! TAKE MY MONEY! TAKE THE ILLUMINATI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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:iconknightpony12:
knightpony12 Featured By Owner May 20, 2015
Victini Nom Plz 
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:icongumcake:
gumcake Featured By Owner May 19, 2015
cuuuuuuute
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:iconaurastrike110:
AuraStrike110 Featured By Owner May 18, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Deze al paar keer gelezen. Mijn oude account is banned zonder redenen :(
Ik hoop da je het nie erg is als ik een paar bases uit je comics maak?
Zoals deze: fav.me/d8tuukm
Moet ik je credit geven? Ik heb je er wel al bij gezet als eigenaar ;) 
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:iconchocolatninja:
ChocolatNinja Featured By Owner May 15, 2015
You cannot resist the face.
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:iconwhyita:
Whyita Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay Twilight! My fave pony/unicorn/alicorn ^^

COOKIES FOR EVERYPONY!
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:icondiscordlexia:
DiscordLexia Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2015
HHNNNNGGGG!!!
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:iconstarryicetea:
StarryIceTea Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2015  Hobbyist
HAHAHAHA i cant stop laughing by the last panel,,just..TAKE THEM TAKE THEM ALL,,
HAHAHAHAHAHA:rofl 
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:iconpetunikka:
Petunikka Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Shining armor: Dad Why do you always give into Twilight?

Night Light: Shut up son you are grounded

XD
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:iconcolonelbsacquet:
ColonelBSacquet Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2016
Shining Armor:

Oh? Well, in that case, I'll have some party with my friends.
I won't be back before midnight.
Bye, dad.

*mutters* sucker.
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snowflake20006 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thats me and mah parents :D
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:iconglitch10:
Glitch10 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2015
well he didn't give in. She asked for ONE not all of them!
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:iconaskponyphilippines:
AskPonyPhilippines Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh Night Light, you have so much to learn.... poor stallion.
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:icon79089:
79089 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
I WISH THAT WAS MY DAD!
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:iconfluttershylover20:
fluttershylover20 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2015
So funny and cute.
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:iconstar-dragon22:
Star-Dragon22 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
Oh god....those eyes.>_<; *puts on a blindfold* Ah...thats better.
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:icondoubleblaze:
DoubleBlaze Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2015
there is one in youtube now :D

youtu.be/a_3BGAqbTQM
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:iconcoltsteelstallion:
Coltsteelstallion Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015
Oh cool...
thnx for sharing ^_^
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:iconkniznik:
kniznik Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2015
Dat face.  No male is immune
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:icondoubleblaze:
DoubleBlaze Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2015
we surrender our soul to Clapping Pony Icon - Complete Stallion Six Clap 

RIGHTtttttt.. guyyyy Twilight Sparkle HI, GIRLS. animated icon 
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:icongodzilladragon111:
godzilladragon111 Featured By Owner Edited Dec 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
is what happens if ANY of the mane 6 asked me for something.
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TheGodSquadAlphaTeam Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Funny how Mother is stronger than Father, hahahahaha! Come on Night Light, you can do it! A firm "NO." Bunny Emoji-89 (Cheer) [V5] GO GO NIGHT LIGHT C'MON MAN---err... stallion---YOU CAN DO IT
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:iconcolonelbsacquet:
ColonelBSacquet Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2016
Well, a father resisting to his daughter ... isn't common. :-P
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:iconthegodsquadalphateam:
TheGodSquadAlphaTeam Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Heheh, I guess not. 
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NoOneCares3244 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Night Light: *looks firmly* N-N
Twilight: Pleeeeeease???
Night Light: YES YES!!!!! I GIVE IN TO YOUR POWER!!
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TheGodSquadAlphaTeam Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
lol
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NoOneCares3244 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Tank you!
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:iconthegodsquadalphateam:
TheGodSquadAlphaTeam Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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KrAvEn1994 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014
Oh no the forbidden face of absolute adorableness!
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:iconsoldierboyxiii:
SoldierBoyXIII Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2014
Curses! Foiled by cuteness again!
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